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Friday 15 March 2013

Ferris Wheel


Two girls Kate and Kim were sitting in a hot muggy car, Kate was driving. She put the windows down while Kim was complaining about the heat. Both girls finally arrived at their destination, the  fair. Attending the fair was a favourite past time, their favourite ride was the Ferris wheel.  

As they approached the fair ground, they could see the ferris wheel from the car. Both Kate and Kim unbuckled their seatbelts and jumped out of the car almost forgetting to lock the doors. They walked through the large gates and ran to the counter to buy tickets for the ride. The man at the counter handed them the tickets. They rushed forward, almost knocking over a young child who help a hot dog in one hand and a pink candy floss in the other.  
Getting seated on the Ferris wheel was a challenge, as it rocked backwards and forwards from the motion of the previous ride. The girls sat side by side (aware that sitting too close together could cause the chair to tilt). Slowly the Ferris wheel began to turn.

The faces of everyone on the Ferris wheel showed broad smiles and laughter filled the air until there was a sudden shudder. A child at the top of the ferris wheel let our a high pitch scream. The girls were worried that something bad might happen so they yelled out to the woman at the control desk to stop the ride so that they could get off. As they got of the ride a feeling of relief rushed through them.  They both walked away and decided to go on the other rides instead.

When the fair was finished and the rides got turned off everyone left. Kate and Kim drove away laughing and smiling. They drove off in their hot muggy car, this time no one complained about anything.

1 comments:

Mrs Dines said...

I really like the way that you reflected on your work and reworked it, to inform and entertain your audience. Well done.

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